Choose some writing you have done in the last few weeks. Paste it below.
Once upon a time in a farm there were six animals which
was a cow,fly and a donkey a rabbit and a bird
was a cow,fly and a donkey a rabbit and a bird
I took them on a trip to the zoo they were having fun
and they were feeling so well and happy.
and they were feeling so well and happy.
Then suddenly at the zoo a lion was running out of
nowhere and the lion was chasing all the animals and got
the animals.
nowhere and the lion was chasing all the animals and got
the animals.
Paste it again. We are now going to re-craft it. To improve our writing today we need to have
- A simple sentence exam
- A compound sentence
- 3 descriptive words
- Capital letters in the right place
- Full stops in the right place
Once upon a time in a farm there were six groups of
animals which was a cow,fly and a donkey,rabbit and a
bird.I took them on a trip to the zoo they were having fun
and they were feeling so proud and happy.
animals which was a cow,fly and a donkey,rabbit and a
bird.I took them on a trip to the zoo they were having fun
and they were feeling so proud and happy.
Then suddenly at the zoo a lion was running out of the
bush and out the gate then when the lion was chasing all
the animals and got the animals to run away.
bush and out the gate then when the lion was chasing all
the animals and got the animals to run away.
hi deelani
ReplyDeletemy name is pilinilose and i am a year seven student. what i love about your story is how you took the animals to the zoo.
i want to say i love your work and keep it up.